Friday, 12 August 2016

A winter in Greymouth. The world in the morning is grey and cold. The reluctance to get out of bed and start the day stronger than ever before. Stepping out the door the wind whips against any exposed skin. The ground damp from the rain earlier. But little frost is visible. The grass soggy underfoot, instead of crunchy, as should be. The brisk cold days bring wild winds and clear blue skies. The black, wet days bring heavy, grey clouds and soaking rain. Some trees stand stark against the sky, bare corpses. Yet most remain green with leaves. Evergreens. Year after year, a pleading for snow. Yet only the mountains in the distance are scattered with a thin covering at their peaks. I wish for white days. For snowmen and snow fights. Followed by thawing out in front of an open fire, drinking hot chocolate. Give me a winter, Greymouth.

2 comments:

  1. The overall image that was created in my mind was that when she was outside all she saw was black, gloomy, damp grounds and sky. Yet she imagines that there can be snow so she can have snowball fights and drink hot chocolate near the fire while staring outside into the distance. The language feature that I discovered was 'Alliteration', for example "wind whips".

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  2. The overall image that I see is someone stepping out of a house on a hill and feeling the cold against her skin and looking about at the snow topped mountains in the distance and the trees around her. One language feature I noticed was repetition "Year after year".

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